托福寫作怎樣做到言簡(jiǎn)意賅

托福寫作如何做到言簡(jiǎn)意賅

不少同學(xué)托福寫作中覺(jué)得復(fù)雜句可以提升作文的質(zhì)量,展示自己“地道”的英文,獲得高分。這種想法有一定的道理,原因是新托福寫作的評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)中確實(shí)有從語(yǔ)法或用詞的多樣性等角度考察語(yǔ)言質(zhì)量的評(píng)分項(xiàng)目,但有時(shí)生硬地追求長(zhǎng)句、復(fù)雜句反而破壞句子的準(zhǔn)確性。下面,我們就來(lái)談?wù)勅绾问鼓愕耐懈懽餮院?jiǎn)意賅,用簡(jiǎn)潔的語(yǔ)言寫出漂亮的句子。

建議一： 避免空洞的單詞和詞組

1. 一些空洞的單詞或詞組根本不能為句子帶來(lái)任何相關(guān)的或重要的信息,完全可以被刪掉。比如下面的句子：

when all things are considered, young adults of today live more satisfying lives than those of their parents, in my opinion.

這句話當(dāng)中的“when all things are considered”和“in my opinion“都顯得多余。完全可以去掉。改為：

young adults of today live more satisfying lives than their parents.

2. 有些空洞和繁瑣的表達(dá)方式可以進(jìn)行替換,例如：

due to the fact that our grandparents were under an obligation to help their parents, they did not have the options that young people have at this point in time.

“due to the fact that”就是一個(gè)很典型的繁瑣的表達(dá)方式的例子,可以替換,簡(jiǎn)化為下面的表達(dá)方式：

because our grandparents were obligated to help their parents, they did not have the options that young people have now.

建議二： 避免重復(fù)

1. 盡量避免重復(fù)使用同樣的詞匯?；蛘哂械臅r(shí)候雖然詞匯沒(méi)有重復(fù),但意思卻有重復(fù)。這時(shí)候可以做一些簡(jiǎn)化的工作。例如下面這個(gè)例子：:

the farm my grandfather grew up on was large in size.

large 對(duì)一個(gè)farm來(lái)說(shuō)就是size方面的large,所以in size可以去掉,改為：

the farm my grandfather grew up on was large.

更簡(jiǎn)潔的表達(dá)方式為：

my grandfather grew up on a large farm.

2. 有時(shí)一個(gè)詞組可以用一個(gè)更簡(jiǎn)單的單詞來(lái)替換,例如：

my grandfather has said over and over again that he had to work on his parents’ farm.

這里的over and over again就可以改為repeatedly,顯得更為簡(jiǎn)潔：

my grandfather has said repeatedly that he had to work on his parents’ farm.

建議三：選擇最恰當(dāng)?shù)恼Z(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)

選擇合適的語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)可以使句子意思的表達(dá)更為精確和簡(jiǎn)練。雖然語(yǔ)法的多樣性也很重要,但選擇最恰當(dāng)?shù)恼Z(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)仍然是更為重要的考慮因素。以下,朗閣海外考試研究中心將推薦幾種考生們?cè)诳紤]選擇何種語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)時(shí)可以參考的原則：

1. 一個(gè)句子的主語(yǔ)和謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞應(yīng)該能夠反映句子中的最重要的意思。例如：.

the situation that resulted in my grandfather’s not being able to study engineering was that his father needed help on the farm.

從意思上來(lái)分析,上面這句話需要表達(dá)的重要的概念是“grandfather’s not being able to study”,而在表達(dá)這個(gè)概念時(shí),原句用的主語(yǔ)是situation,謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞是was,不能強(qiáng)調(diào)需要表達(dá)的重點(diǎn)概念,可以改為下面這句話：

my grandfather couldn’t study engineering because his father needed help on the farm.

2. 避免頻繁使用“there be”結(jié)構(gòu),例如下面的句子：

there were 25 cows on the farm that my grandfather had to milk every day. it was hard work for my grandfather.

可以改為：my grandfather worked hard. he had to milk 25 cows on the farm every day.

更簡(jiǎn)潔的句式為：

my grandfather worked hard milking 25 cows daily.

3. 把從句改為短語(yǔ)或單詞。例如：

dairy cows were raised on the farm, which was located100 kilometers from the nearest university and was in an area that was remote.

簡(jiǎn)介的表達(dá)方式為：

the dairy farm was located in a remote area, 100 kilometers to the nearest university.

4. 僅在需要強(qiáng)調(diào)賓語(yǔ)而不是主語(yǔ)的時(shí)候,才使用被動(dòng)語(yǔ)態(tài)。例如：

in the fall, not only did the cows have to be milked, but also the hay was mowed and stacked by my grandfather’s family.

本句不夠簡(jiǎn)潔的原因是本句的重心應(yīng)該是“忙碌的家庭-my grandfather’s family”,而使用了被動(dòng)語(yǔ)態(tài)后,仿佛重心變成了cows和hay。下面的表達(dá)方式是主動(dòng)語(yǔ)態(tài),相對(duì)來(lái)說(shuō)更簡(jiǎn)潔一些：

in the fall, my grandfather’s family not only milked the cow but also mowed and stacked the hay.

5. 用更為精確的一個(gè)動(dòng)詞來(lái)代替動(dòng)詞短語(yǔ),例如下面這句話：

my grandfather didn’t have time to stand around doing nothing with his school friends.

stand around doing nothing其實(shí)可以用一個(gè)動(dòng)詞來(lái)表達(dá),即loiter：

my grandfather didn’t have time to loiter with his school friends.

6. 有時(shí)兩句話的信息經(jīng)過(guò)組合完全可以用一句話來(lái)簡(jiǎn)練地表達(dá),例如：

profits from the farm were not large. sometimes they were too small to meet the expenses of running a farm. they were not sufficient to pay for a university degree.

兩句話的信息可以合并為下面這句更為簡(jiǎn)潔的句子：

profits from the farm were sometimes too small to meet operational expenses, let alone pay for a university degree.

以上內(nèi)容就是讓你的托福寫作更簡(jiǎn)潔的三條建議,希望大家作個(gè)參考,不要讓過(guò)于復(fù)雜的難句變成你文章的冗雜部分,那樣不僅增加了因?yàn)檎Z(yǔ)法問(wèn)題失分的可能性,也會(huì)對(duì)你的作文大打折扣,寫作要量力而為,漂亮的文章不僅僅是靠復(fù)雜句堆砌而成的。